Draft Revision

I feel like our draft is missing emotion. We need to act more like the scene is our reality. I think that our performance is not natural enough to be believable. In order for this to happen we must all know our lines very well and work on our reactions and emotion when certain things happen on the stage. Also, our stage setup must look like we live in Haiti. We need a curtain and we need blankets to lay on the floor. The reason why we need these things is because Lili does not have enough money to own a bed and they do not like in a house with different rooms, so the curtain is what separates Lili and Little Guy. The curtain is very important because it allows for Lili to work as a night women to protect her son from the truth. In the performance when Lili tells Little Guy that she is a night women, I have to be shocked at that. I also need to talk angrily to the angel and Guy when I tell them that I know that Lili is a night women. I have to act like I really want to work at the sugar mill because I really do not like the fact that my mother is a night women. Also, when I read my monologue at the end after Lili dies, I must say it in a slow mourning way because I know that she is dead This is important because this performance needs to be sold as it actually happening. It has to look like it is real life and each person in the group must become their character. Another thing that will help this performance is the lighting because it will help to set the atmosphere of what is happening.